tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post665715510905351104..comments2024-03-22T03:21:52.628-04:00Comments on Reading, Teaching, Learning: Celebration Saturday and Slice of Life Challenge - Day 8Holly Muellerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00476411667354933648noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post-24019462782879769872014-03-08T20:12:40.816-05:002014-03-08T20:12:40.816-05:00Holly -Love the scene you wrote. I agree with thos...Holly -Love the scene you wrote. I agree with those who suggested aging it up to 7 & 8 for your character. I think it will give you more flexibility. I love the scene. I wonder if you asked some eight year olds to describe something for you will begin to give you more of an ear for their voice?!Alyson Beecherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05943268196184314426noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post-76254171201647268882014-03-08T19:54:46.673-05:002014-03-08T19:54:46.673-05:00One thousand followers! That's amazing! You ...One thousand followers! That's amazing! You are so brave to put a piece of fiction up for critique. And everyone has such great ideas and suggestions. I like the idea of making it for a younger group, 1st or 2nd grade, but also teaching new vocabulary. One of my favorite authors is Kate DiCamillo and she never shies away from using strong, rich vocabulary. Margaret Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04434866104385187658noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post-18247845361571049942014-03-08T17:24:52.347-05:002014-03-08T17:24:52.347-05:00Thanks everybody for your comments. I think I'...Thanks everybody for your comments. I think I've realized my voice and story line is better suited for older than early reader. Now I'm thinking more 2-4th grade. Holly Muellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00476411667354933648noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post-76181089899587937262014-03-08T16:57:03.856-05:002014-03-08T16:57:03.856-05:00There is so much celebrating happening here! 1000 ...There is so much celebrating happening here! 1000 twitter followers! Wow! I just passed 50 and that excited me:) I really loved your enthusiasm when talking about books. Perhaps Book Whisper will get started tonight.Jaanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02027755562339582129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post-90894641886636954802014-03-08T16:22:37.284-05:002014-03-08T16:22:37.284-05:00Lots to celebrate! I love the story you have crea...Lots to celebrate! I love the story you have created from your own memory pieces. I teach 4th grade and I think this writing would probable fit for this age group. You are off to a great start! Good luck.Leigh Anne Eckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558611848583070310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post-30704348254600064772014-03-08T14:26:20.905-05:002014-03-08T14:26:20.905-05:00You were clever to set yourself a focus for this c...You were clever to set yourself a focus for this challenge - first collect, then play and work with the ideas. When you asked for advice, I first thought of Kevin Henkes and Cynthia Rylant, but quickly realized that they write in third person. Then I thought of Astrid Lindgren's Children of Noisy Village, the main character turns seven at the beginning of the book, but it is not an early reader chapter book. then my mind went black. Sorry for not being helpful. I look forward to seeing what approach you take and where your revision leads you.Terje https://www.blogger.com/profile/13569210226711674834noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post-46124135972566734602014-03-08T12:24:19.053-05:002014-03-08T12:24:19.053-05:00I was thinking about doing a combo post today… I j...I was thinking about doing a combo post today… I just might go back and make it a "too for one." wiring for young readers… they seem to talk in short abrupt phrases, but I like a book to model better language… does this make sense? Remember they are just learning to master inferring and imagery. I have a friend WHO loves to eat peas straight from the garden, your post made me think of her. Deb Frazierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02357198767241625023noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post-49443177447433763352014-03-08T12:20:47.772-05:002014-03-08T12:20:47.772-05:00Girls in my fourth grade class are all arguing ove...Girls in my fourth grade class are all arguing over my two copies of Snicker of Magic. Will definitely need to buy more copies. You have a lot to celebrate this week!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post-80990329563442512162014-03-08T11:33:53.021-05:002014-03-08T11:33:53.021-05:00Love all your celebrations, Holly, especially that...Love all your celebrations, Holly, especially that 'ice cream book club' idea! As for your writing, I don't know the early reader books well, but how about going through your piece and eliminating the adverbs and most of the adjectives. The actions really do tell the story! Just a thought!Linda Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14983144542632353870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post-61129073764539781732014-03-08T11:04:08.302-05:002014-03-08T11:04:08.302-05:00I love the scene you've set up and vocabulary ...I love the scene you've set up and vocabulary is great! I'm agreeing with Amy Rudd's suggestion of making it a second or third grader. I can't imagine Natalie shelling peas for a second and she's almost 5. :) I love the vocabulary you've used. I think it should be an older "early reader" audience or a young intermediate audience (does that make sense?).Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03686178925901139554noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post-44113508205030485932014-03-08T10:52:16.183-05:002014-03-08T10:52:16.183-05:00100 followers is awesome! What's your Twitter...100 followers is awesome! What's your Twitter handle? I'll follow you! :-)Holly Muellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00476411667354933648noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post-77939183456617104832014-03-08T10:49:27.969-05:002014-03-08T10:49:27.969-05:00A meet the teacher day would be fun. I remember wh...A meet the teacher day would be fun. I remember when my oldest first met her teacher. No, she doesn't have to a kindergartener. Just exploring. It's amazing how hard that early reader voice is! I do LOVE Junie B. Jones. :-) Thank you for your feedback!Holly Muellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00476411667354933648noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post-40097921465364959402014-03-08T10:23:06.980-05:002014-03-08T10:23:06.980-05:00Holly,
I think Junie B Jones has a first graderish...Holly,<br />I think Junie B Jones has a first graderish sort of voice, could you make it her first day of first grade or second grade? Or meet the teacher day? My sons school does that...they have a two hour meet the teacher day the Monday of the first week of school. Does she have to be a kindergartener?Amy Ruddhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18177520075043676835noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2752544695499885154.post-25874993087274082432014-03-08T10:18:34.467-05:002014-03-08T10:18:34.467-05:00Holly, thank you for reminding me that there is so...Holly, thank you for reminding me that there is so much to celebrate and so many ways to find inspiration in this wonderful world. Hey, I am "up to" 100 followers on Twitter--and that was a big deal to me. :)Chris H.https://www.blogger.com/profile/09342945061771571638noreply@blogger.com